Elinor Kibbe
Thursday, November 10, 2011
Need some advice for paragraph?
It's kind of abrupt, a little brief. You could spend some more time and effort just on setting the scene, describing her enormous pain and worrying. And also, describe the relief and happiness afterward, as she holds her baby.
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